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revising a personal Narrative eMbedded
about Choice
assessMeNT 1
SCORING GUIDE
Scoring Criteria
Exemplary
Proficient
Emerging
The narrative
• is missing one or
more elements of an effective personal narrative (the incident, the choice, the consequences, and/or the reflection)
• includes no
clear outline or implementation of a plan for revision
• is minimal and/or unclear.
Incomplete
Ideas
The narrative
• skillfully describes
an incident and a choice made, and thoroughly reflects on the lesson learned
• shows clear evidence of skillful revision to improve meaning, clarity, and adherence to narrative style
• includes thoughtful reflection with explanations for changes.
The narrative
• describes a choice,
explains the consequences of the decision made, and reflects on the lesson learned
• outlines and implements an appropriate revision plan that brings clarity to the narrative
• includes reasons for the changes made.
The narrative
• does not describe or
develop a personal
incident
• shows little or no
evidence of revision to improve writing, communication of ideas, or transitions to aid the reader.
Structure
The narrative
• has an engaging
beginning that hooks the reader and reveals all aspects of the incident
• has a middle that vividly describes the series of events leading to the incident as well
as the narrator’s feelings, thoughts, and actions
• has a reflective ending that examines the consequences of the choice.
The narrative
• includes a beginning
that introduces the
incident
• includes a middle
that adequately describes the narrator’s feelings, thoughts, and actions
• provides an ending that examines the consequences of the choice.
The narrative
• reflects very little
revision to the first draft’s organizational structure
• may not include a beginning, a middle, or a reflective conclusion
• may include an unfocused lead, a middle that merely retells a series of events, and/or an ending with minimal reflection and closure.
The narrative
• begins unevenly with
no clear introduction
or lead
• may be missing one
or more paragraphs describing the incident and the narrator’s feelings about it
• has an inconclusive ending that does not follow from
the incident or the narrator’s choices.
Use of Language
The narrative
• effectively uses
sensory details and figurative language to vividly “show” the incident
• contains few or no errors in spelling, punctuation, or capitalization.
The narrative
• uses sensory images
and details to make
the incident clear
• contains spelling,
punctuation, and capitalization mistakes that do not detract.
The narrative
• does not use sensory
images and details to make the incident clear
• contains mistakes that detract from meaning and/or readability.
The narrative
• does not clearly
describe the incident
or provide details
• contains mistakes
that detract from meaning and/or readability.
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