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a Read through the information Revising by Creating Complex Sentences while students mark the text and make notes.
Revising by Creating Complex Sentences
8. Revise the paragraph below by combining sentences to create complex sentences. Use a dependent marker to connect the dependent and independent clauses.
We should go to the movies on Saturday. The weather will be lousy. The test we had today was tough. A movie will be a good way to unwind. The new Hunger Games installment is out. I know you’re a big fan of the books. This will convince you to see all the films in the series, too. I may be able get my brother to drive us. He wants to see it anyway.
Sample response:
Since the weather will be lousy Saturday, we should go to the movies. It will
be a good way to unwind after the tough test we had today. The new Hunger Games installment is out. While you are a big fan of the books, this new release will convince you to see all of the films in the series, too. I may be able to get my brother to drive us because he wants to see it anyway.
Check Your Understanding
Explain three ways you can revise your writing to improve its coherence.
Sample response:
1. Include transitional words and/or phrases.
2. Delete unnecessary or repeated words.
3. Use looping to add more detail.
my Notes
aSSeSS
Pay attention to students’ ability
to apply the revision strategies by looking for specific revisions made in their drafts (in two colors).
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Allowing students to read their
work aloud is an effective strategy for revising for coherence and wordiness. Consider having students read their revised letters in writing groups or pairs.
Consider reading aloud and displaying a coherent example from your class while asking the author to “think aloud” the revisions he or she made.
You might have pairs work together to write their directions for “how to draw a house,” using transitional words and phrases and avoiding wordiness. Display this writing along with the pictures they drew of the houses.
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