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Introducing the Strategy: Deleting
When you revise by deleting, you identify irrelevant, repetitive, or meaningless words and remove them from your writing. When you delete a word, phrase, or sentence, reread the section aloud to make sure that it still makes sense after your deletion. Deleting sentences or parts of sentences can improve overall coherence in your writing.
Revising by Deleting
4. Revise the paragraph below. Identify words and sentences that are irrelevant, repetitive, or meaningless, and delete them by drawing a line through them. Then write your new paragraph in the space below.
My family and I had a great time on our fun rafting trip. We went to Colorado. Colorado is called the Rocky Mountain State. The rafting was really very exciting and scary. The weather was a little cold, so we all got sick on our way home.
5. Why did you delete the words and/or sentences you did?
6. Return to the student sample argumentative letter from Activity 3.10. Reread it to see if any part is irrelevant, repetitive, or meaningless. Make notes about any sentences that you would consider deleting and why.
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7 Introduce the strategy of deleting, and then have students make revisions using the strategy.
8 Ask students to explain in writing their additions and deletions so that you can review their understanding.
9 Students will next examine the letter in Activity 3.10 and make notes about any deletions they would make, and why.
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