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Creating a Narrative: revising
Language and Writer’s Craft: Revising for Transitions
Another way of revising your writing is to add transitions. Transitions help the reader follow a narrative by showing how ideas are related. The following words and phrases are examples of common transitions.
again
also
in addition
too
but
still
however
because
then
so
first
second
next
before
afterward
yet
finally
at last
to begin
later
as soon as
not long after
instead
at the last moment
in the end
INdepeNdeNT
readING LINk
4. The following student narrative does not include any transitional words or phrases. It also lacks details to help the reader imagine the scene. Highlight each place where a transition might fit. Underline sentences that would benefit
Read and Respond from sensory details and vivid verbs. Circle or draw a box around the pronouns. Outline the sequence of
events from your independent reading book. What has happened so far? In your Reader/Writer Notebook, include major events, examples of important dialogue, and transitional words and phrases.
my Notes
When the author Gary Soto was in sixth grade, he needed a new jacket. His mother bought him a green jacket that he did not like at all. It was ugly. It was bad luck for him at school. He did poorly on tests and his friends didn’t pay any attention to him. He thought his teachers and classmates all made fun of him and his jacket. The author’s luck didn’t change over time. No girls came his way. He tried to show his mother how bad his jacket looked. Her glasses were always steamed up. The author blames those bad times on his green jacket.
5. Rewrite the paragraph above, adding transitions, sensory details, and vivid verbs.
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